Sunday, December 6, 2009

Poem: Father

This is a first draft of a poem I'm thinking of sending to Chicken Soup for the Soul. It's free verse. Do you think I should rhyme it? Do you get the meaning? Do you think that fathers will relate to it? I'd appreciate any comments you could give to me. Thanks for your help.

by Kathy Stemke

His sanctuary’s found at sea
With nature he is one

He sails with the wind on silent waves
And his spirit is free

Eyes bluer than the bluest ocean
Gaze, lost in thought

Wistfully, he ponders unfulfilled dreams
And questions the success of his life

If only he knew....
How I feel

Shakespeare, Einstein, Da Vinci, Bach,
To name just a few great men

Their merits are meaningless and trite
when compared to you.

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Anonymous said...

I wish I'd studied the poems in the 13 books I've read, but didn't. Sorry.
J. Aday Kennedy
The Differently-Abled Writer

kathy stemke said...

Thanks for commenting Jessica.

Connie Arnold said...

Kathy, your poem is beautiful and touching, a wonderful tribute! I think most fathers would relate to and appreciate it. I know I as a daughter do! Best wishes to you in submitting to Chicken Soup for the Soul.

Karen and Robyn - Writing for Children said...

Kathy, the poem is beautiful and I'm sure fathers will get it.

The only text I'm not sure of is on silent waves (2nd stanza) - this made me think for a moment he's passed on, but the rest of the content doesn't. Was it intended this way?


Mayra Calvani said...

This is a lovly poem, Kathy. Very touching.